Petals On the Rain-Wet Grass of May, or; Shut Your Gloomy Face the Fuck Up, Ezra Pound (process)

Besides the poem itself, which I’m very pleased with myself about, I like that the word “magnolias” in the third line can be replaced with “cherry trees” and it works just as well.

Below the finished poem I’ve placed, as I occasionally do, the drafting process it went through on the notes app of my ipod as I wandered around in the wind and the wet today working on it piece-meal between coffee chats and grocery shopping.

Petals On the Rain-Wet Grass of May, or; Shut Your Gloomy Face the Fuck Up, Ezra Pound

Restless
spring wind—we see
the magnolias strip off
their blossoms for you, breathlessly
scatter

petals
over the rain-
wet grass of May, stand bare-
limbed waiting for the rain, the sun,
and you

to sew
green sleeves but while
they discuss line and form
you fade away—quit your shameless
murmurs.

Scatter Petals Over the Rain-wet Grass of May

The wind
stripping petals
from the magnolia trees

[Lucky] [Shameless] [Fickle] [Restless]
spring wind, look how
the magnolias strip off
their blossoms for you, restlessly [breathlessly]
scatter

petals
over the rain-
wet grass of May, stand bare-
limbed waiting for the sun to sew
green leaves

[limbed waiting for the rain, the sun,
and you]

to sew
green sleeves but while
they discuss line and form
you quit your fickle [shameless] murmurs, fade
away.

to sew
green sleeves but while
the other two discuss
design, you murmur
cajole.

About John MacKenzie

I'll mumble for ya. Poetry, plus most things quantifiable: science, neuroscience, memory, epistemology, baseball. And so on.
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